Saturday, June 12, 2010

Beneath The Smiles

You set off to earn your bread and butter, leaving a bonny baby and smiling wife behind. Driving through the chaos, you realize how everything you ever wanted from life is there for you, giving you a reason to go on and be happy. The usual grind at work does nothing to dampen your spirits because you know you're going to be home in a few hours. You just can't wait...
She says she wants to lie down. Pretty unusual for her at this time of the day. She's smiling though, so it means she's all right. Just tired perhaps. Let her rest, she needs it. It's difficult to raise a child without any help.
You enter the room and find her on the bed with her eyes open. She's smiling still. It's hot, but she's all covered up. Looks like her body's aching.
Are you all right? Why don't you get up now? It's been a long time, let's grab something to eat.
She doesn't reply. Her eyes are now shut. Has she gone to sleep? Maybe you should come back later and let her rest a little while longer. But what's this? There's water on the floor. You better wipe it or she'll slip and fall. Switch on the lights.
What's all this?? Get up, get up!
It's not water, it's blood. There's blood everywhere. On the floor, on the sheets.. She should have gone to the doctor for a proper abortion.


34 comments:

  1. Gosh that's tragic and the ending was very unpredictable!

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  2. i was just as shocked when my mother narrated this to me!

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  3. OMG! I'm stunned...so sad. Well written!

    ♥xx♥

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  4. thanks cynthia. the woman died within minutes, she bled so much. may god bless these so called "educated" people with brains!

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  5. :((

    I don't know what to say. :((

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  6. I have goose bumps after reading this...beautifully written and I tght this was a piece of fiction but after reading the comments i dont know wht to say

    HD

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  7. i've dramatized it a bit but the incident is factually correct. i had a hard time deciding how to write this. simply narrating it would rob the story of its essence. also, it wouldn't have a lasting impact. thank you hd.

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  8. Oh God!!! It's gut wrenching.... I have goose bumps... I can't say anything... It's awful!!!!

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  9. aw i'm sorry that this made everyone feel so bad. but i think all women need to read this and realize how important it is to get periodic check ups and go to a good doctor. home made remedies are fine till an extent but beyond a point you MUST go see a specialist.

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  10. Ok.. I'll be honest here. I read this the very day u posted it. I read it everyday for a week. Each time I wld think of commenting, I would get goosebumps & I would chicken out. Somehow my mind would go blank whenever I would read it.

    You have a way with words Rima, you can express yourself very well. You have to potential to make us laugh & give us goosebumps. Hats off!

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  11. u write beautifully and yourself are so beautiful!!!!!!!
    omg,what a package u are
    may god bless you

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  12. thank you so much tanveer, those were some of the most enlightening words i've heard about my writing. i cannot tell you how fortunate i feel i am to have people like you reading my blog.

    nikunj, thank you so much for your compliments. :)

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  13. As you know Rima, I am a new mom and reading this, I feel terrible. I can just imagine how much pain both physical and emotional pain the lady went through, I am disturbed that such things are happening.......:(

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  14. yes jomol it is very disturbing and i hope each of us learn a thing or two from such incidents. this is the post i was talking about when i commented on your pregnancy/abortion related post at imbb. finally wrote it.

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  15. Hey Rima, sorry I forgot to answer part of yr comment...lol. Yes I went to fashion school straight after my 12th. I will do a post about me sometime :)

    Thanks for yr constant support. U are one of my valuable readers...muah! :*)

    ♥xx♥

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  16. that sounds so interesting! much better than all the boring stuff that people do! and reading your blog is very enjoyable. glad to be one of your readers!!! :*

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  17. Have you seen the movie revolutionary road ? This is kate winslet's story. Just heart wrenching.

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  18. hi jan. i haven't seen the movie but i'll go read its plot now.

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  19. Hi Rema
    i just saw your blog and i really love it...and yes you are also very pretty dear...

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  20. thanks rakhshanda. do stay around :)

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  21. Hi Rima , love your blog..im a 23 year old from delhi too :)
    Do check out my blog and if you like it then follow me, ill be following you too
    peachesandblush.blogspot.com

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  22. Hi Rima,
    i always feel sick when im reading stories like this..
    I always wanted to have another child but I never got one, i got 5 miscarriages in 3 years time.. Im always thinking why dont u give my the baby if you dont want him or her..
    Now im recently divorced and the chances to have another child will be zero.. It just makes me so sad..

    Janet (blogger.com/mamadeluxe) Dont know why my password isnt working

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  23. Tragic..! Very well written. Hope no one makes this mistake.

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  24. hi mehak, so good to hear that you're from delhi too. and we're almost the same age! now i'm really happy :D
    i'll visit your blog right after commenting. do stay around!

    hi janet,
    it's heartening to read about your experience. i did not wish to offend or depress anyone in anyway by writing this post. i hope people learn or at least keep it in mind to be sensible with the choices they make in life. rest, of course, is in the hands of god. i wish you a beautiful life. :* lots of hugs to you.

    sunaina, thanks for appreciating. the incident is indeed very tragic.

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  25. oh my God, I went speechless. this is so tragic and sad! :(((

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  26. Dear Rima

    I dont know what to say...and I agree with Janet too....

    I pray that someday may God give her that sheer happiness of raising a child in her arms...

    And I know that God does answer prayers..


    Regards,
    Dipti

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  27. dipti, unfortunately the woman did not survive.

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  28. Rima I meant to say that may Janet get that sheer happiness of raising a child in her arms...

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  29. Rima have you seen the movie "Revolutionary Road" (starring Kate Winslet and Leonardo DiCaprio)the plot is very similar to this...it's a beautiful movie...

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  30. dipti, i've heard a lot about that movie. will watch it for sure now :)

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  31. what exactly happened?? i'm not able to understand......

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Please dont mince your words!